Essay 1 Feedback

Today we had a whole group COP session instead of in our separate groups, this was so that Simon was able to tell us how to submit our essays/essay on the 12th of December.  I used this time to also ask Simon for feedback on my first essay, in terms of things to talk about, elaborate on, remove from the essay, if I have referenced right etc. This is some of the feedback I received, I found that talking to Simon and receiving feedback from him was extremely useful as it gives me enough time to improve my essay and make a start on my second essay.